Matt Bellamy

I really like this. It flows well, but what I really like is the ending - it really made me think. Very interesting. Your rhyming is good but at times ...

I like this. It has a slight element of suspense - I wanted to know who you were talking to, and who you were, and then when you revealed it, ...

This is nice. :) Short and sweet, which seems to be your style. But you say you wrote this at the park, well, I think it could be even better ...

This is okay. The middle two lines should probably rhyme like the rest because it braks the flow a bit, and you need to check for spelling mistakes, otherwise people ...

This is much better! It looks like a proper poem, you rhyming is good and it flows nicely. Plus, you don't spread yourself too thin - you took one idea ...

I really enjoyed reading this! I love your description - while I was reading it, I could actually imagine being there, but not only that, it sounds like a place ...

Hello! I really enjoyed reading this poem. However, there are a couple of things I think you can do to make it even better: You start off in the first ...

Hello! This is very good. You make great use of rhyme and it flows really well. Your description is good as well - what you describe in places sounds a ...

It certainly makes a change to read an amusing poem rather than a serious one. And yes, this does have flaws, but it certainly made me laugh! :D In places, ...

Hello! I'll be honest, I like this poem because it's short. I have a short attention span at times. :P I like the format you have used, and your rhyming ...

Hello! This poem has an unusual problem - lots of times, poems don't have much punctuation in them, but in this instance, I think you have too much. For example: ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS. :) I like your poem, it is interesting and emotional, however there is alwayas room for improvement. The first half flows quite well, but after that, ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS. I think your poem has real potential, but there are a couple of things that let the poem down a little. Firstly, the rhyming is a ...

Hello! I think what you have here is the beginnings of a good poem. It just needs... more. Maybe more description and more feeling. Perhaps something that makes it personal ...

Hi there! I really like this poem - you have a very pleasing tone, and it is wonderful to read. Just one or two things though: you begin by describing ...